Substitution poems

Guidelines:

1. Choose a poem that speaks to you, even if you do not fully understand it.
2. Use the same number of syllables in each line of the chosen poem.
   OR
   Substitute for each word in the original poem another word of the same part of speech

My Poems:

Original: A poem by Rumi

By day I praised you
and never knew it.
By night I stayed with you
and never knew it.
I always thought that
I was me – but no,
I was you
and never knew it.

Substituted:

In the morning I saw you
and never forgot your face.
In the evening I passed by you
and never forgot your smell
I always thought that
I was crazy – but no,
I was in love
and never could forget you.
© Purvi 16-02-04

Original: A poem by Rumi

Tonight
is the night
It’s the creation of that land of eternity
It’s not an ordinary night,
it’s a wedding of those who seek God.
Tonight, the bride and the groom
speak in one language.
Tonight, the bridal chamber
is looking particularly well.

Substituted:

Today
is the day
It’s the creation of that poem in my heart
It’s not an ordinary day,
it’s a flow of the feelings of a poet.
Today, the heart and the pen
speak the same language.
Today, my pen
is writing particularly well.
© Purvi 17-03-04