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TECHNOPOLIS #1
This story is very original to me. It's about what the earth may have been like if the alleged alien crash in 1932 had happened and was not covered up by the government. These aliens shared with us their technology and fast forwarded our technological breakthroughs. OK, now go 17 years later 1949. The world has drastically changed since first contact with the Collarians, the cars have anti-gravity drive (they fly), people communicate over video phones, and some people have laser guns. On the other hand a lot of things have stayed the same; people still have the same prejudice towards what they don't understand and don't want to learn about it so they can understand; fashion trends in clothes, cars, structural shapes are the same as it really happened. That's the good news the bad news is humans and Collarians don't get along very well, the Collarians stick to themselves in their own section of town that is their own style.
The story is told from the view of a newspaper reporter, Madison James. There have been a lot of attacks on Collarians and he has been reporting about it. He meets with the ambassador to the Collarians to get a quote from her about the attacks. He leaves and gets his article into the paper and goes home. Shortly, someone from the paper calls to tell him where to be for the next attack. That means that they know in advance where and attacks are going to be taking place and they're not informing the authorities. James thinks to himself about it saying that someone at the paper is forcing him to report on the attacks and that he/ she/ they is/ are responsible for the attacks. He flashes back to a battle in W.W.II he was in, remembering that the Collarians shared their technology for weaponry with the Nazis. That's why he condones these attacks on the Collarians but this attack is on the Embassy with a human ambassador inside so he goes to warn her. He helped her escape but she forgot something she holds dear. He goes back to get it and his boss is there and figures out what he's doing and two goons there beat him up. James gets out just before it blows up, because she wasn't at the embassy the boss sent out "battle drones like they used in the war. They escape and both need medical attention. Meanwhile James boss is reporting to the real mastermind, who is ........ are you ready for this.............. a Collarian himself.
This story has a lot of potential, it's a very good concept, but something about it just isn't right. Until I got about halfway through I wasn't even very interested in the story. The second half almost made up for it; but the story as a whole needs work. I just can't put my finger on how.
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